 - Usman M. Bajwa  Contact Usman M. Bajwa Usman M. Bajwa's Gallery |
You Critique needed Would really like to know what is wrong here. I can take it and will really appreciate your honest criticism! Thanks. UB.
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Kathryn Wesserling |
Usman - It's a visually beautiful image. I tried hard to find things to nitpick. The only possibilities that come to mind are... 1] There might be too much in it. I'd crop it from the left just to where the first heavier pillar begins (eliminate the street lights on that side.) 2] Crop from the right side so that only four people show (group of 3 and single figure.) 3] To keep the ratio aspect of your original, then crop some from the bottom, and the rest from the top. You won't lose much of either of these. What this cropping might accomplish is to narrow the scope of the scene, make the horizon seem more level, lessen the impact of those strong streaks of orange light to the right, and finally to get rid of that uneven tree. This is a powerful sunset especially in relationship to the Shakar Parian. Imo, panoramic look to the original weakened the true "star of the show." Hopefully, others will chime in with their opinions. Personally, I'd reenter this one (or the revised edition) often!
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Bob Cammarata |
I like the overall composition and color tone of the sunset but the people in the foreground are a distraction. (In my opinion, silhouettes should be primary points of interest, not incidental elements.) Also, in reading your caption, I can also offer a valuable piece of advice someone once taught me...
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- Dennis Flanagan Contact Dennis Flanagan Dennis Flanagan's Gallery |
The colors are very rich and it's a nice location but overall, this isn't much more than a snapshot. I don't see a clear subject matter for my eye to gravitate to or follow through the picture. Does that mean it's not an EP??? Not at all. If you think it's worthy, enter it again.
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- Usman M. Bajwa Contact Usman M. Bajwa Usman M. Bajwa's Gallery |
Thank you Kathy, Bob and Dennis for your insightful feedback. It really helped me understand some of the things that I should have done in the first place. Its always great to get honest feedback from seasoned professionals. Thanks again! UB.
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Kathryn Wesserling |
Usman - never in my wildest dreams would I expect someone to group me with BobC as a professional! lollllllllll Judging from Dennis' Gallery (love the Invisible Man series!), he belongs up there, too. I am simply an enthusiastic (obsessive?) hobbyist, who is struggling to learn. However, thank you for the lovely compliment.
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- Usman M. Bajwa Contact Usman M. Bajwa Usman M. Bajwa's Gallery |
Shall resubmit after some tweaking with the original!
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Clayton T. Williams |
I totally agree with everyone on here. The colors are great it just needs some minor tweaking. Dennis, Travis
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- Dennis Flanagan Contact Dennis Flanagan Dennis Flanagan's Gallery |
In studio and some location shoots I use a Calumet Travelite 2250ws three head portrait kit. I also own a number of backgrounds from Backdrop Outlet. If I have to use on camera flash, I use a flash extender and a Nikon SB-900 Speedlight. If needed I also use a 36in reflector to either block unwanted light or as a fill reflector.
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- Kenneth De Pree Contact Kenneth De Pree Kenneth De Pree's Gallery |
There is a lot to like about this photo, but it is not a show stopper. I think the photo should have been taken closer to the monument, making it larger and the center of focus. As it stands, the build is too small and there are too many distractions. Since you can only post an 800x600 image, you probably have enough to work with. Cut from the right side and from the concrete in front of the monument. The concrete is ugly and adds nothing to the photo. Cut out as much of it as you can. Make the building and beautiful sky stand out.
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- Kenneth De Pree Contact Kenneth De Pree Kenneth De Pree's Gallery |
To balance what needs to be cut from the right, including that miserable tree part, you will also have to cut from the sky since there is not enough concrete. But you have lots of sky so you can easily spare some.
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- Usman M. Bajwa Contact Usman M. Bajwa Usman M. Bajwa's Gallery |
Thanks Ken for your observations which are very helpful.
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Meghan Gonski |
Usman, Not everyone can get an EP. I have seen photos that definetly deserve an EP and didn't get one. Sometimes it's just entered at the wrong time. Othertimes it has to do with the photo, it's not at it's best.
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- Usman M. Bajwa Contact Usman M. Bajwa Usman M. Bajwa's Gallery |
Thanks Meghan for your inputs and time! UB.
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